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My First Novel (Sector Eight)

PostPosted: Thu Nov 05, 2015 6:33 am
by TheNinja476
This is the first stab that I have taken to write something for fun. I've only written a chapter so far.
The link to the novel: Sector Eight
Could I get any critiques? I don't mind how harsh you are, I know that my writing skills are wack.

Re: My First Novel (Sector Eight)

PostPosted: Thu Nov 05, 2015 3:54 pm
by Painkillerz
Looks like it could be interesting. My one problem with it is that if there was that much blood everywhere, then how is he (the boyfriend) still alive, much less explaining what happened.